I’M HERE
We were suppose to meet here, that’s what she said.
Was it my imagination? Did I really hear a little girl call to me from the shadows of the ruined villa?
What was it she whispered?
My name…and someone else’s. But whose?
A name from my past? Marco…or some such. I don’t recall anyone by that name.
What was this place? An arena. Perhaps a theatre. It feels familiar, although I’ve never been here before.
Wait now…
Mama spoke of playing in an open-air theatre when she was a little girl. With a friend? A…a…a…
Marco???
MAMA!!!
HERE…???
hugmamma's MIND, BODY and SOUL 
spooky and – sad. Aren´t the souls of our beloved ones around us everywhere?
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I’m sure they are. My aunt was a Hawaiian witchdoctor, a KAHUNA, so I have this sensitivity to the spiritual. I don’t dwell on it, however. I prefer to focus my energies on this world, and trying to make it a joyful place. 🙂
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Oh! Spooky… that “mama” is horror inducing. Well-written.
-HA
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Thank you for the pat on the back. Really appreciate it… 🙂
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Freaky! You had me at “mama” and I’d have been happy with that as an ending 🙂
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I think I was aiming for spooky. I’m finding out that readers definitely have their own “take.” I’ll have to try this story again and see if I can develop it more succinctly. Thanks for the comment. 🙂
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Very open ended — leaves a lot for the imagination to fill in, in a good way.
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Thanks! That’s what I thought. Except, I forgot that I was suppose to have a…beginning, middle, and an end. So looks like I didn’t get it right. Have to work on that, although I appreciate your comment…lots! 🙂
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Dear Millie,
This one left me scratching my head. Nice imagery and a hollow feel though.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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After I read your comment, I realized I’d not followed the rules…beginning, middle, and end. My ending definitely leaves the story “up in the air,” which I’d intended. Maybe I’ll try and rework it to fit the challenge. I got carried away in a Harry Potter moment. Thanks for the critique. 🙂
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Dear Millie,
Who’s should whose. Other than that, good story. Loved your last line.
Aloha,
Doug
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Mahalo for the correction. I’ll have to do a better job of editing since writers are now reading my posts. I’d not thought of that when I joined various writing challenges. The feedback is good. 🙂
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Very sinister. Well done.
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It’s so great how readers bring a different perspective to a story. I’d not thought “sinister.” I’d been thinking more like “spooky.” It might, or might not, be obvious that I don’t read thrillers. That’s my hubby’s preferred reading. I can dabble in ghostly, even though it scares me. hugs for your input… 🙂
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I’m spooked! Great job on this.
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Thanks! I’ve done my job then.
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Nicely creepy.
janet
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Nicely put. Thanks! 🙂
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Aahhh, I see you’ve left us to decide for ourselves whether Mama’s really got a role in this story or not. I can see a number of possibilities growing out of this unique take on the prompt.
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Truthfully…I hadn’t thought that far. But you’re right, I can already imagine twists and turns. 🙂
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